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As I've said before...
Pop the bubbly, you've got another hit here, EoF. Please keep them coming. You're off to an interesting start and I can't wait to see where this goes.
Peace be with you and Blessed be
The comic...
The GA comic was a nice touch.
I am looking forward to reading the next chapter.
-- Sleethr
Olivia
I had to toss her into this one---after all the main character is a comic book fan so I thought it would be cool to give her a slight cameo in it :)
Hunters
'nuff said.
Well, the writings on the wall, but it will be interesting how witches gain their powers.
Kim
Rule 63
The second you mentioned I was clued in. LOL! As for those guys in black I have a feeling that perhaps the Black Crosses isn't simply going to sit back and let Mom and Dad mop them up. In the immortal words, "I have a bad feeling about this!"
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Grover
Looks like
Looks like Kelly has Hunter problems.
hmmm interesting start
what can i say i've only just started reading your stories, i was looking for somthing different to read and i'm impresseed can't wait to see how thing happen here ,
hmmm interesting start
what can i say i've only just started reading your stories, i was looking for somthing different to read and i'm impresseed can't wait to see how thing happen here ,
A NOTHER NOTCH ON YOUR STORY GUN GRIP.
Very good start and as I know your stories only get better. I will keep reading.
The only bad question is the one not asked.
Months?
Somehow I think Kelly's going to be moving in with Mary for longer than he intends (even if the parents survive, it may take longer than anticipated to sort out the Black Crosses, and it may become too dangerous to return home)...
However, at least Ravencrest is a relatively safe haven - with such a large concentration of Unseen, any potential threats have to either be big, audacious or stupid to mess with the town's residents...
No doubt almost as soon as he arrives in Ravencrest he'll be thrown into one misadventure after another - not to mention finding that Trevor's left and his stunningly beautiful cousin's appeared instead (but has already been claimed in the love stakes).
Oh, and I loved the Rule 63 Green Arrow - now I wonder why you decided to target that particular character- and if in the course of the comic she has to practice some different skills from her male counterpart :D
As the right side of the brain controls the left side of the body, then only left-handers are in their right mind!
Tracy
As far as the rest of the world goes, Tracy is Trevor's twin sister not his cousin :)
A good beginning
I'm intrigued. I like your writing and what you've laid out so far.
long road home
nice story so far but how stupid could the kid be some crazy looking guys checking him out and seem to take a real interest in him in a fast food joint and takes the long road home . guess helped set mood though . noticed some1 mentioned trever being transformed what story was that cant seem rember atm lol
kids are insane
And so are teenagers. You can say the responsible parts of their brains haven't developed yet and probably wouldn't be far from wrong. However in this case Kelly has a boy's fearless about certain things. He wasn't taught the same justified paranoia that girls are. I admit I'm a little surprised at his behavior since he has been bullied and has a lot of survival training. You would think he would at least err on the side of caution and stick to the short, well lit and traveled route home.
On the other hand, he really is, if not depressed, in the dumps over being parked with his grandmother and cousin. The situation with his friend, Tom, isn't helping either.
I do hope he will tell his parents about this, but he may not. The pronouns they used may convince him that that weren't looking specifically for him. Very unwise, but he's got that teenager rebellious 'how could you do this to me' thing going too.
Interesting too how this set of bad guys are magic dudes gone wrong instead of Hunters. Figures the darn Hunters would attack the peaceful Unseen instead of those who really need to be taken care of. I suppose it's like the Police officer asking do you know why I stopped you? "I'm the only one you could catch!" (Not a wise reply by the way!)
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Grover
I'm the only one you could catch...
Apparently these two couldn't catch even one teenaged "girl."
Peace be with you and Blessed be
Yet Again
Yet again EOF has started a GREAT story I am looking fowars to the next chapters -- KUDOS _ RICHIE2
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off to another great start. keep up the good work.
robert
Yet again the start of another EOF classic.
Great start my friend can't wait to see where this one goes.
@TheUnKnownWatcher,For the fairest is trevor/tracy's story and EOF's first full story in his Dark Realms universe and a hella good story.
yay thanks for another story,
yay thanks for another story, I'm really starting to enjoy this universe :)
I can't wait for the next one
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In the Beemer
Are these guys black magicians?
The Goons
Possibly :) Maybe you'll find out in Ch.2 :)
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Another great start to what will surely be another great story!
I wonder who these suits are... I'm sure they are after Kelly because of his parents.
Have a deliciously devious day,
SOTW..
Nice start on your new storyline EOF! I'm looking forward to seeing more of Kelly's adventures once she gets to Ravencrest!
Thanks
Wow, thanks for the cliff hanger!!!
This is going to make me take
a second look at For the Fairest
Goddess Bless you
Love Desiree
The Fariest
For the fairest it is a GREAT story :)
Love Samantha Renee Heart
FtF Characters
There will be a few For The Fairest characters will that be popping up in this one---Mary and her grandmother chief among them of course :)
Kelly
Is in BIG trouble I think he needs to tell his mom about the two espicaly about scar face & about them trying to kidnap him. I think they are with the Black Crosses group not very good news for him.
Love Samantha Renee Heart
Hmm...
Interesting opening.
Where are we going with it though? We have a kid who has some gender ambivalence (at least externally), some ambivalence about being "dumped" while his parents go off to have "fun adventures" and we have an important emotional friendship that's failed. He's also due to head to Ravencrest.
So we've spent a lot of time learning about Tommy. Is Tommy going to be a continuing element of the story? Kelly has a lot of emotional investment in him for him to just vanish from the story, but I don't see how Tommy could translate into Ravencrest.
So far we've been introduced to a lot of elements that seem to potentially be working at cross-purposes. It's a little soon to be making an assessment of any of that however.
Give us more about the emotional landscape please. Will Grandma be an antagonist in this?
Interesting,
Not sure what to think yet.
People (mafia?) following the kid home?
A friend who is friends with his former friends bully?
Parents who put their careers ahead of their kid?
You've gotten my interest.
Wow the end was eerie... Why
Wow the end was eerie... Why would someone want him?
Strange....
thank you for writing this interesting story,
Beyogi
Season of The Witch Part-1
Why does Kelly's Mother not have some sort of shield for him to wear, or some spells to use when needed?
May Your Light Forever Shine
Shields/Spells
Using spells or things like that on a Dud---especially protection spells---would serve no purpose. Duds aren't usually the target of anyone.
Happy, happy day
I love everything of yours that I've ever read; I've been saving this one for a rainy day. What a bonus it was to see it listed as completed... professional grade writing and I don't have to wait for updates. EOF, you've made my day!