This is more thoughtful than many of the MAU stories, and its action scenes are as gripping and fast-moving as any. A couple of issues, though:

1. I saved all fourteen chapters offline in one big file using the "Printer-friendly version" of chapter 1. However, in this form the chapters are out of order: chapter 10 is followed by 13 and 14, then 11 and 12. Probably you have the sort weights wrong in the book outline tab.

2. Besides a few miscellaneous typos here and there, I saw one mistake that's quite frequent: mis-punctuation and mis-capitalization of dialogue tags. For instance:

“No fewer than a half dozen alphabet agencies have reacted to this. The Agency-with-no-name.” Danni smiled, “Has classified everything up into the stratosphere, but that has only slowed the others, not stopped them.”

should be punctuated and capitalized thusly:

“No fewer than a half dozen alphabet agencies have reacted to this. The Agency-with-no-name,” Danni smiled, “has classified everything up into the stratosphere, but that has only slowed the others, not stopped them.”

If you're following a piece of quoted dialogue with a dialogue tag like "he said" or "Bridget asked" or whatever, the initial piece of dialogue needs to end in a comma. And if you're continuing the quoted speech after a dialogue tag, it needs to start with a lowercase letter unless it's beginning a new sentence, in which case the dialogue tag itself ought to end in a period. E.g.

"This is silly," he said. "I look absurd in this get-up."

vs:

"I look absurd in this get-up," he said, "and I feel even sillier."

Also, "smiled" is kind of marginal as a dialogue verb, but that's an individual stylistic choice I won't complain about.

You mentioned two stories in an earlier chapter, "Green Rain" and "A Bodysuit Story Sorta Kinda". It wouldn't necessarily make sense to mention the title and exact source of those stories within the body of the story, but you could link to them or reference them in an author's note at the end of that chapter, or the end of the story.