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Leesa
I enjoyed this story.
Thank you!
No nose tweak for you! Hugz - **Sigh**
Sighs are the natural language of the heart.
-Thomas Shadwell
I swear, I always think of
I swear, I always think of Pern whenever I see the name Lessa.
Fun story. Sometimes, horrible situations can lead to what turns out to be the happiest of endings. This is the way of things.
Oh, yes!!
I think Anne McCaffery has put her brand on "Lessa" as a character name! ;-)
“When a clown moves into a palace, he doesn’t become a king. The palace becomes a circus.” - Turkish Proverb
Except
My character's name is Leesa, not Lessa. So AM and I have no overlaps there I think!
Although I was gonna have Leesa riding a dragon in the sequel... JK!
Hugz - **Sigh**
Sighs are the natural language of the heart.
-Thomas Shadwell
Leesa - Lessa
Picky, picky, picky
“When a clown moves into a palace, he doesn’t become a king. The palace becomes a circus.” - Turkish Proverb
Hey Beoca!
Thanks for your comment!
Hugz! - **Sigh**
Sighs are the natural language of the heart.
-Thomas Shadwell
dam, you went and made me cry
just beautiful !
Thank you Dot!
Love you!
Hugz - **Sigh**
Sighs are the natural language of the heart.
-Thomas Shadwell
Well done!
I have multiple perspectives on this. We tried to find a live-in caregiver for my mom, to allow her to stay in her home a few more years. But with the amount they would want we could have made a downpayment on Ft. Knox! So I know what Cassie is going through.
And I totally get the pain and feelings of rejection that Lessa has been dealing with. Both Robyn's parents and mine evicted us in quick order when we told them we were lesbians and lovers. In fact, Robyn's parents tried to cancel our lease on the little one room closet somebody amusingly called an "apartment". It was pointed out by the landlord that the only names on the lease were Robyn's and mine so they had no legal right to cancel the lease. And their attempts to get the police to pick us up as delinquent minors wouldn't work as we were 18 and legally adults.
Lessa, hang in there, you've totally got a good heart. Observant people will see it, and will help you along the way. You attract good people around you because you are good people. I really want to give Lessa a big hug right now, life goes better with hugs!
“When a clown moves into a palace, he doesn’t become a king. The palace becomes a circus.” - Turkish Proverb
What a wonderful comment
Thank you Karen!
Hugz! - **Sigh**
Sighs are the natural language of the heart.
-Thomas Shadwell
Rejection.
It's very difficult to forgive somebody who's rejected you outright, especially if that rejection also involves some element of banishment and/or separation. (I found it quite impossible to forgive and sadly, now that I'm long past any age were it would do any good, I never ever will forgive them.) They are long gone anyway and good riddence. Some things just cannot be forgiven - or indeed, forgotten.
This is, or rather would (in another person's context) be an excellent story of foregiveness and or redemption, but for me, sadly it just rakes up bad stuff. Thank you though for a story that gave me cause to reflect.
Beverly. (Yes, I did give it a kudo because it truly desered one.) xx
Oh dear!
I'm so sorry my story raked up those raw memories and emotions, Beverly.
I find that people in my life confuse forgiveness with restoration. As in, Cassie could forgive Jimbo, so that resentment won't eat her happiness for the rest of her life. That doesn't mean that he gets his old relationship restored with her, though! I have people that think i am unforgiving of their treatment of me; No, I have forgiven, but I will never restore the trust and relationship we once shared - well, maybe for some of them, if they did the restorative work of rebuilding trust (none of the ones I'm talking about have done so).
In other words, I won't shoot you for stealing from the cash register, but you still don't get to work here anymore!
Hugz! - **Sigh**
Sighs are the natural language of the heart.
-Thomas Shadwell
A wonderful, sad, uplifting story
I have to comment from a writer's standpoint that the opening graph was a great misintroduction, that sends the reader off in the wrong direction only to be pulled back when Leesa appears, Most writer's would have opened with Leesa at the door thinking it would be more dramatic.
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Thank you for your input!
I'll take all the advice I can get to be a better writer! I usually tweak and re-read my stuff and then have an editor review it, but I just threw this together quickly. To all others out there - writing suggestions appreciated!
Hugz! - **Sigh**
Sighs are the natural language of the heart.
-Thomas Shadwell
You started...
In the exact right place as far as I'm concerned. Also, wow, just wow! This is one really great short story or novella! You tugged so hard at the heart strings that I had to get a couple of tissues. Don't you dare change a word!
Warm fuzzies
That's what your comment just gave me ... Thank you so much Missy!
Hugz! - **Sigh**
Sighs are the natural language of the heart.
-Thomas Shadwell
A truly lovely story,
the kind I live for here on BC, If you write more I would love to read it!I am a writer here too:
https://bigclosetr.us/topshelf/book-page/55449/wendy-jean
Thanks, Wendy!
Hugz! - **Sigh**
Sighs are the natural language of the heart.
-Thomas Shadwell
Great little story. Three
Great little story. Three people who really needed someone, found each other just at the right time. Because of this, they all got forgiveness from each other and one, Leesa, actually got part of her family back. Wonderful.
Thank you Janice!
Hugz! - **Sigh**
Sighs are the natural language of the heart.
-Thomas Shadwell
Great story!
My late wife was bedridden for 9 years before she graduated... her positive looking ahead term for dying. I did all you mentioned and more. Doing so was never an issue as it was done out of love. Being a caregiver is living love as depicted in your story. Great job!
Boys will be girls... if they're lucky!
Jennifer Sue
What a huge compliment!
Thank you Jennifer!
Hugz! - **Sigh**
Sighs are the natural language of the heart.
-Thomas Shadwell
Had to wait for my eyes to dry.
Is this the same person who just posted a short blog over on Religious Forums about Bathrooms? She's a Guitar player too.
My gosh, that story penetrated my heart in a really special way. Thank you so much ! This is how life should be lived.
Much peace
Gwen
I didn't post a blog
So that person isn't me. But I do contribute here sparsely; you and I talked about my last serial story here, Sacrificial Alter.
What an awesome compliment you've paid me about this story! Thank you!
Hugz! - **Sigh**
Sighs are the natural language of the heart.
-Thomas Shadwell
That's it,"The dragon riders of Pern"
Really really nice story, had me a little misty every so often.
Thank you!
Thank you Karen!
Hugz! - **Sigh**
Sighs are the natural language of the heart.
-Thomas Shadwell
Not Leesa
Sigh, I enjoyed your story immensely. So uplifting. As to editing, don't bother. You're a story-teller. Tell us your stories. We need them. Please.
Thanks for the vote of confidence, Rianna!
Peace and love to you!
Hugz! - **Sigh**
Sighs are the natural language of the heart.
-Thomas Shadwell
Leesa
What a lovely story
Thanks!
Hugz! - **Sigh**
Sighs are the natural language of the heart.
-Thomas Shadwell
"tweak your nose"
If you do, it goes beep.
I skimmed the last third of it but still read it to the end. It's 11 pm and past my bed time but I still read it. Thanks for writing it. Good night.
Of course I won't tweak your nose!
Because you left a comment!
Thanks for reading and commenting! Hugz! - **Sigh**
Sighs are the natural language of the heart.
-Thomas Shadwell
I Really Like The Story
It was a really nice story. Too often there are people that carry around regrets and allow mistakes to make them believe they aren’t worthy of forgiveness . Jimbo realized that he needed to ask for forgiveness and Leesa’s Mom and aunt had to do the same for allowing their husbands to drive Leesa from their home . It was beautiful how Cassie took care of Jimbo and how Rev Trevor facilitated it for all of them to be taken care of.
Thanks for a nice meaty comment!
I appreciate it! Love your pix too!
Hugz! - **Sigh**
Sighs are the natural language of the heart.
-Thomas Shadwell
Leesa's acceptance, Jim's forgiveness...
Together they make a great story. It takes someone special to come into a life to stay.
Great story
Hugs, Jessie C
Jessica Connors
Thank you for your comment!
Hugz! - **Sigh**
Sighs are the natural language of the heart.
-Thomas Shadwell
Good story
Thanks for publishing this. You have done a great job of storytelling. Characters and situations are believable. Lots of heart.
>>> Kay
Much thanks for your compliments!
Thank you!
Hugz! - **Sigh**
Sighs are the natural language of the heart.
-Thomas Shadwell
I loved it
Such a wonderful story.
I hope your health issues work out.
Gillian Cairns
Me too, Gillian
Thank you for your comment!
Hugz! - **Sigh**
Sighs are the natural language of the heart.
-Thomas Shadwell
well,
There wern't any mistakes I stumbled about and this is a beautiful story for sure!
The characters all are just that little bit larger than life, that makes me wish the world was populated with those more.
What you've done is what George Sand wrote is the job of any true artist: show what the world could be like, not dwell on or even wallow in the misery, that is all too common.
You can be really proud of this little tale, at least in my eyes it is a true work of art.
Monique.
Monique S
I didn't notice...
Any glaring errors either. Of course I read most of it while pretty tired so... YMMV on that. Still, I'd think carefully before changing anything other than a non-deliberate misspelling. The story stands, and stands very well IMHO!
I had to google YMMV
.... and got Your Mom Makes Vegetables ???
(JK - I now know what it means!)
Hugz! - **Sigh**
Sighs are the natural language of the heart.
-Thomas Shadwell
:P~
Your Mileage May Vary... In other words someone else may present a differing opinion in this case. Though you certainly have gotten this one exactly right as far as I'm concerned.
Monique, Thank you so much
... for your super comment, especially the George Sand reference! I appreciate you!
Hugz! - **Sigh**
Sighs are the natural language of the heart.
-Thomas Shadwell
Loved it
Such a sweet little tale. Glad that I took the time to read it, been busy so I've skipped a lot on the site lately, glad I didn't skip this one.
Thank you for reading and commenting!
Hugz! - **Sigh**
Sighs are the natural language of the heart.
-Thomas Shadwell
Tears.
Tears.
Helped care for my Grandma until the Alzheimer’s got too bad.
Just about bypassed the story—glad I didn’t.
Thank you for your sacrifice and giving
I pray that you will reap good things in your life as a result!
BTW, thank you for your comment!
Hugz! - **Sigh**
Sighs are the natural language of the heart.
-Thomas Shadwell
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Thank you for a nice story.
Health and life issues ... ?
Just know that you are loved. With your talent, I hope life lets you share more with us.
T
Yep.
Health and life issues. Won't get more into it than that, for now at least.
THANK you for your love and compliment!
Hugz! - **Sigh**
Sighs are the natural language of the heart.
-Thomas Shadwell
A truly touching story that
A truly touching story that tugs at my heart strings
Thank you for reading and commenting!
Hugz! - **Sigh**
Sighs are the natural language of the heart.
-Thomas Shadwell
Been There, Done That
Caring for someone who is pretty well incapacitated is definitely not easy. This story of two people who were prepared to do that brought a few tears to my eyes. Those like Leesa are hard to find and are to be treasured when you do find them and whether or not she was transgendered was totally irrelevant.
This was a lovely story.
Oh YAY! Joanne's here!
I love to see your comments - they are always well thought out, illuminating, and it's an honor to have your reaction and opinion! Thanks for being a blessing in my life!
Hugz! - **Sigh**
Sighs are the natural language of the heart.
-Thomas Shadwell
Good, that.
How about a tissue alert though?
Teri Ann
"Reach for the sun."
Thanks!
I didn't put a tissue alert when posting because I never like to assume that people are going to be moved by my work; feels like boasting to me. But I'll post one here:
!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! TISSUE ALERT !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Hugz! - **Sigh**
Sighs are the natural language of the heart.
-Thomas Shadwell
I'm Not Leesa
What a great little story, all I can say is thank you for sharing it.
Willow
You're welcome!
And thank YOU for commenting!
Hugz! - **Sigh**
Sighs are the natural language of the heart.
-Thomas Shadwell
Having been a caregiver
I can sympathize with the desperate search for someone to help. Forgiveness may not come so easily as it did in the story, but it will make life better for everyone when it does.
I agree
Forgiveness takes a lot of work usually, and even then doesn't always happen. But in the context of a short story, I chose to portray the happy exception and not the rule. Maybe it will inspire someone, I dunno. Thank you for your caregiving service!
Hugz! - **Sigh**
Sighs are the natural language of the heart.
-Thomas Shadwell
Amazing
Very well done and touching story.
Thank you Sarah!
Hugz! - **Sigh**
Sighs are the natural language of the heart.
-Thomas Shadwell
Beautiful story
Terrific story, please go on with more of this or like this.
Robyn Adaire
Thank you, Robyn
for reading and leaving a much-appreciated comment!
Hugz! - **Sigh**
Sighs are the natural language of the heart.
-Thomas Shadwell
Not Much to Add...
...to all the comments here. (Which is the reason I didn't comment before. I did kudos it at first read; I don't often do that before a contest ends.)
A good emotional ride; I'm still teared up here after the second reading. Thanks for posting it.
Eric
Awww!
Thank you SO MUCH for your input !
Hugz - **Sigh**
Sighs are the natural language of the heart.
-Thomas Shadwell
Tissue time
Damn. You got me. Years flowing nicely. Thank you.
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This is my second read.
It is still a tearjerker.
Thank you so much for a great story.
T
So Not Fair
It's been a long hard day. We're going to get an ice cream or chocolate malt at Matts Malt Shop. Un huh it was a real store and Matt ran it. Don't forget we live in the country and it's seven miles to town. We get two and a half miles down the road and the car runs out of gas. By the time we go home, get jerry cans, make it back to the car, finally get it started, Matts is closed.
Now do you have any idea how I feel about this story???? You gave us the first chapter and I'm looking around for, no not a malt but the second chapter.
hugs hon,
always,
Barb
Life is a gift. Don't waste it.
Oklahoma born and raised cowgirl