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It was a fairly predictable outcome
But well written as always and an enjoyable read.
Angharad
This was.
This was a very well written and a very enjoyable read. This is the second story I've read of yours and I've found both your prose and the way you flesh out your characters and give them that spark called life. Thank you for sharing this well written and charming story with us.
cute !
I guessed Pete was going along because what was happening suited her. But Bro is lucky she didn't chew his "carrot" off!
Backfired
I'm so pleased that Bunny won in the end.
The best laid plans of 'Mice and Men' do fall apart.
But at least bunny enjoyed it in the end.
Polly J
As they say in tennis . . .
Game, set, and match . . . made in heaven?
Well, maybe not. Bro seems like a prick. I’m confident Belle can do better!
— Emma
Now That You Mention It
Now that you mention it, Hannibal seems open-minded and Belle could have tipped him off.
Bro paying for Hannibal's date's prom outfit would seem like a small price to pay for wanting to humiliate Belle (and a little life lesson, to boot).
Prom with Hannibal
Would anyone really go to the prom with Hannibal?
-- Daphne Xu
With the right dress and right make-up ....
;)
The Biter Bit
Bro is an absolute turd, but his nefarious plan came to naught and delivered him a surprise. Pete won again.
Why do I see Bugs Bunny chewing on her carrot..."Ehh. What's up Doc"?
I Like Hannibal
I see this monster gorging down food at an incredible rate and I think of Bluto.
Bluto
... is sexy compared with Hannibal.
-- Daphne Xu
Breathing the Words
That was fun. Predictable like others have said, but a lot of fun.
And I love finding a hidden gem like this:
Too funny!
Thanks and kudos (number 31).
- Terry
Also My Favorite Line
Stories don't always have to have a twist.
In this story, the Faks (Fox) and the Hare (Rabbit) are natural enemies. The rabbit outwits the sly(?) Fox. It's straight out of a racist Disney movie.
Faks isn't a bad person. If he was he wouldn't have a friend as lovable as Hannibal. He, like so many adolescents is using a sledgehammer to correct a petty grievance.
He will become a better person or Bunny will hippity hoppity down the trail.
Jill
Angela Rasch (Jill M I)
Until I read you explaination of this fabulous fable
I suspected that the name somehow was aimed at me.
Only shows how
1) egoscentric I am
2) paranoid I am
;)
She’s tricksy, Bru!
Don’t put double — or even triple! — meanings beyond her! And just ‘cuz you’re paranoid . . . well. You know. ;-)
— Emma
While Bro's At It
He probably shouldn't play chess with Belle, either.
Given the way he started to realize Belle's comfort level and thinking of her as who she is before the reveal, there may be hope for the not-as-clever-as-he-thinks cad, yet.
Am I the only one?
The opening line of "Things need to change between Pete and me." seemed to me to indicate nothing nefarious, rather a...longing? Bro was the perfect foil for Bunny to emerge from her burrow, all dressed up and ready to go. Seems to me, this elaborate subterfuge was unnecessary, but oh so fun. This story was as comfortable a read as 'Goodnight Moon' which I've probably read a thousand times to my children. Not a lot of suspense, but like a fur lined glove, it was warm and snuggly. Thank you for posting, Jill! :DD TAF
DeeDee
Bro's problem probably not solved.
I don't see a self-confident Bunny as any less of a competitor to Bro than Pete was.
Depends of course on local laws and whether Bunny will declare herself as female officially. In some stated that would influence what team she can be on. Not in some other states.
Oh my, I just realised that the Hare had become a fox
A really foxy lady!
The only surprise…
…by the end was that they didn’t find themselves at the Bra Patch. ;-)
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Well played, sir!
I was trying to think of something to do with that line!
— Emma
Bra Patch
Astute of you. "Bra Patch" is what locals call that part of Como Park.
Jill
Angela Rasch (Jill M I)
Lucky guess
Jill
Ive no idea where Como Park is, I was just thinking back to the Brer Rabbit stories I remember reading as a child.
Over here I was aware of Lake Como in Italy and some Italian American singer that my maiden aunts had on 78s!
I really enjoy all your writing, both short stories and novels.
Rob xx
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One of Them
Bro Faks is one of the pricks, but apparently he hit the jackpot. Of course, this is BCTS -- not to be confused with BCBS. Karma shmarma. "Things need to change between Pete and me. I thought." Boy, did they.
"Pete’s parents are so laid back they forgot to enroll him in kindergarten when they should have." Is kindergarten really a prerequisite for first grade these days?
"[Hannibal] was the first three-hundred-pound lineman in our high school’s history who had made first-team all-state" -- a nice bait-and-sudden-switch. I had to look up a subsequent word, though, and I'm trying not to imagine. I'm currently thinking of dog-vomit fungus.
-- Daphne Xu