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I just starting reading this yesterday……..
And caught up to this point today.
There is a huge jump or change in the story between parts 15 and 16, which I guess is understandable as there is a gap of three years between them. Unfortunately, it makes the story disjointed, hard to follow. The last five chapters also seem to jump back and forth in time a little. There is also some repetition of information which was discussed earlier in the story in a way that doesn’t make sense.
You also jump from Denise’s circle being blessed by Hera, to now needing a blessing from Celia Love, who is an avatar for some other goddess.
In other words, when you read the story straight through, it seems to be one story up to the end of chapter 15, and a different but similar story from chapter 16 forward.
D. Eden
“Hier stehe ich; ich kann nicht anders. Gott helfe mir.”
Dum Vivimus, Vivamus
So sorry for posting unedited material
You are so right and I'm sorry for posting unedited material. I mistakenly thought what I was cutting and pasting into BCTS was ready. I have done a rewrite and edit for the new chapter 16 which has replaced what was posted in this chapter originally. When I complete the editing of all of the chapters, I'll start posting again. For now, Dance, Dance, Dance, Amy is on hiatus.
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