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Spooky in a way, but I liked it.
Spooky mostly for what it brings to mind, i remember reading it when it was submitted for the contest. Then I was trying to remember what it reminded me of now I know. The whole mirror thing reminded me of the synopsis I'd read for Coraline, which made me worry there was something sinister to this alternate dimension. The mention of counterparts though now has me thinking of something else, mostly a couple interconnected works of Stephen King. The part of counterparts reminds me of the "twinners" mentioned in "The Talisman" and "Black House". Also the body left at the mirror is reminiscent of certain scenes in "Drawing of the Three" from his Dark Tower series, when Roland body hops into our world through the doors on the beach.
At any rate, good work, it intrigued and captivated me to read it a second time.
The only reason for time is so that everything doesn't happen at once - Albert Einstein
Nice story
This is an interesting story. I would definitely be interested in seeing what else you might write with your mirror worlds. I'd personally love it if you wrote one with a bit of a Through the Looking Glass theme to it. Topsy turvy logic mingling with mixed up genders. Could be quite fun!
SuZie
So Sad Christy
But, At times, we MUsT make such hard choices.
May Your Light Forever Shine
May Your Light Forever Shine
Thanks for the comments
eraser820 I am fascinated by your comment, because I had never even heard of Coraline. I just went and checked out a synopsis on IMDB and it looks interesting. I have also not read the Stephen King novels you mention, believe it or not I'm not a fan of horror/scary books/movies in general. I always thought of this story as more of a Twilight Zone kind of story. I know that the concept of alternative worlds and mirrors is nothing new of course, but I hope to have a new take on it anyway. I am glad that you enjoyed both versions.
suZie thanks also for your comments, of course I know the basic story of Alice and her looking glass, though I don't think I could do Mr. Caroll justice if I tried to attempt it, but I can certainly give it some thought. I'm glad that you liked the story.
Stanman, first off, thanks as always for your commments. I should also thank you again for your edit of the original version. I'm not 100% sure that the edits you made were in the base copy I worked on for this story and also since
I made a number of other changes, I didn't want anyone to think that anyone but me is responsible for any that errors that remain in this version. But I appreciated it at the time, and I still do. I do agree that choices sometimes must be made, and Jeffrey really made the only one he could here.
Anyway thanks to you all for your thoughts. I liked the original version myself, and I like the new version as well. I'm actually not sure which I like better, so I am definitely watching the reaction closely to see what others think. I have some ideas for another mirror story, for instance would anyone be interested in a story about Claire and her search to find out more about the mirrors and what happened to her friend?
Hugs,
Kristy
New, Improved Mirror on the Door
Hey, Kristy. I like this version better. I think you improved it quite a bit. You added some much needed depth to the story.
I liked the background about the mirror. You clarified some things for me. I'm still a little confused about the counterparts but that's minor.
As someone else said, this story is spooky. It might have been better to post it closer to Halloween. It's okay though. I like it. Anytime is a good time for a good story. Right?
Thanks!
- Terry
Thanks Terry, As you were
Thanks Terry,
As you were one that had made the comments on the original that led to my revising it, that means a lot to me. I thought about waiting till Halloween, but decided, since it was a revision that I did not want to do that. There will be another Halloween contest then if I understand it correctly and I did not want this to get mixed in and confused with that.
Hugs,
Kristy
New Improved Giant Economy Size
I liked this when you entered it in the All Souls contest, and these extra little touches make it even better,
Joanne
I use mirrors in my stories
I use mirrors in my stories all the time, but they reflect what the viewer might or might not want to see, and I even have dialogues, but this story is so good. It reminds me of Rod Serling's always ironic take on dreams and wishes. Keep writing; this was touching and sweet as well as clever!
"She was born for all the wrong reasons but she grew up for all the right ones." Bacci e tanto affeto, Dio ti Benedicta! 'drea
Love, Andrea Lena
I wish!!!
I wish that I could have had a mirror when I was young!! Then I wouldn't have had to go through all my difficulties in becoming my true self!!! Now I do see my true female self when I look into a mirror!! I have been lucky I was able to transition and have the surgeries I needed! I know that there are many of us who are not so lucky!! They have mothers or fathers or spouses like Joann had!! This story is a microcosm of the struggles we trans folk have to endure in our lives!!
It is just too bad that many of us have to chose to sever our ties to family to achieve what we so desperately need!!
Fare thee well,
Pamela
"how many cares one loses when one decides not to be
something, but someone" Coco Chanel
Awesome sad story
Wow, this story touched my feelings... The mother that wouldn't accept that her son/daughter was transgendered, him fleeing into a fantasy? world. In the end she dies because she wasn't accepted as she was in the world she lived in.
The great thing about this story is that we don't know wether it really happened, or whether he died while trying to enter his fantasy world.
The moral is: Love your children as they are or you might loose them.
A sad story, but still beautiful and an awesome piece of art.
Thank you for writing this awesome story.
Beyogi
I Remember This Story
I remember reading this story in the original version. This was my first chance to read the revised version.
The more I think about it, the more I think it's a brilliant allegory. When parents reject their children's identities, they risk losing their children. Sometimes that's to suicide. More often, just to estrangement. This story shows us a result that resembles both. Joann disappears to a new world, never to come back, while Jeff's bloodied corpse is discovered in his room by his mother.
Parents, accept and love your children, for who they are, not who you wanted them to be. If God didn't want them that way, He wouldn't have made them that way. You still have a right and a duty to teach them ethics and how to cope with life and dating and keeping safe and healthy, but you have no right to negate their essential identity. That way lies tragedy and loss.
The Mirror
And many of us must make the choice to either suffer as we are or pass through the mirror. Sadly, we can not be both places because society will not allow it. What a strikingly true metaphore.
Gwendolyn
The tears...
The tears... Poor Mom, poor Claire.
-- Daphne Xu