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very interesting!
this looks like it could be very interesting
Dorothycolleen
Black powder and lace - 1
Good start on a new story, waiting for more
May Your Light Forever Shine
May Your Light Forever Shine
A very intriguing start, and
A very intriguing start, and one which I hope leads us onwards. I'm certainly hooked.
Not having read any of your
Not having read any of your work previously, I've no idea what your previous fare was like. That aside, I'd say you can write. Given your introductory prose, and the story itself, I'm reminded of some of David Drake's writings, his and S.M. Sterling. Jerry Pournelle has also used similar settings. It'll be interesting to see where you go with this.
Yours,
JohnBobMead
Yours,
John Robert Mead
Yes, I was referring to
Yes, I was referring to David Drake, and S.M. Sterling, at the beginning. Among others.
He entered the hall to get warm. She left it two hundred years later.
Faeriemage
He entered the hall to get warm. She left it two hundred years later.
Faeriemage
Interesting!
Seems that we need a lot of world-buildng to actually make heads and tails of the world of the story. :)
Faraway
Big Closet Top Shelf
Where you can fool around like you want to and most you get is some bemused good ribbing!
Faraway
Big Closet Top Shelf
Where you can fool around like you want to and most you get is some bemused good ribbing!
World-building
True. I am trying not to simply throw it all out in a big multi page block of prose, but more ease into it. Comments that I have my characters make will be important. And I will spend some time explaining, but hopefully not more than is necessary.
The next chapter should shed quite a bit more light on what is happening, but it will add to the number of questions as well. ;)
He entered the hall to get warm. She left it two hundred years later.
Faeriemage
He entered the hall to get warm. She left it two hundred years later.
Faeriemage
I normally am not a fan of historical fiction.
But this altered world/tangent thing you described in the foreword got me reading this. And I'm pleasantly surprised by the story thus far. I'm wondering about the whole sciences bit and why there seems to be a revulsion to them. I guess I'm in for more.
*Big Hugs*
Bailey.
Bailey Summers
IMHO.... Yeah, pompous but What the Hell!
Sorry about that obvious ref to a certain Canadian pop singers hit.
-- Ghod she's haut! --
-- grin --
Oh, right, where was I?
From the description of the fight with the smugglers this is a civilization that lost high tech or turned its back on it. The early matchlock guns that needed a brace to be held and aimed is what, 15th century tech but a magnesium flare, that's mid or late 1800s. To get magnesium you need electricity to separate the metal from sea water or from other elements in ores. It's extremely reactive and can't be made by chemical separation alone, at least not in any quantity. So in this world or at least this country, some tech is renaissance level yet others is late Victorian period.
Implies either they lost the tech OR there was a war. Maybe a bio war or atomic war and high tech got this all but witchcraft reputation. Somehow they have deliberately chose to lose the knowledge of high tech thus the distasteful reaction to HIS saying his father dabbled in *science*.
As to the stunning blonde, Anhelette. I wonder is she she is the counterpart of Mar. But in this case a male living as a woman? Or maybe she is just a exotic female and our Mar is bi or lesbian and only just realized. She was almost gender neutral from her own recollections of never have been attracted to men or women.
Our hero/heroine is ambivalent about her life. She must have once loved being a woman, her fond but momentary recollection of the fashions and being seen as beautiful but chaffed at the restrictions on women in her society. She yearns for adventure and the way she talks I think she hated her father or at least there was bad blood between them. I got the impression IF she could have had a chance at adventure as a woman she would have remained living as one but the dainty *cage* society places women in this land has forced her to chose to live as a male.
As to the smuggling what were they smuggling? Booze, precious metals or tech?
I am intrigued.
John in Wauwatosa
John in Wauwatosa
Science
For some reason this society deemed that women were better at the thinking pursuits and men were better at the physical ones. So a man debasing himself and actually pursuing science would be the same as him putting on a dress and parading about town.
If I wasn't clear, everyone thinks that Mar is a guy. An effeminate guy, but a guy none the less. Her full name was Margheritte, and she picked the more masculine Mar when she started up her charade after her father's death.
EDIT: Silly me. Misread the comment. Yes, Mar is realizing for the first time she might be attracted to a woman.
Naming Conventions:
In this specific society, Men tend to be called by three letter names. Women will have a feminine ending attached to that name. Sometimes, though rare, women will be named after their father in this manner.
Wil - Wilhemina
Kei - Keillie
Mar - Margheritte
Ale - Alecia
Anhelette is strange in that her name has no masculine counterpart.
More on that later, of course.
He entered the hall to get warm. She left it two hundred years later.
Faeriemage
He entered the hall to get warm. She left it two hundred years later.
Faeriemage
Looking very interesting.
Looking very interesting. Historically, a number of women have disguised themselves as men to serve in military forces. I like the writing and am looking forward to more!
wow
I can see this will be a really good story as I'm already enjoying it!
An interesting start
the slow build up, the character development, looks to be a great start! Definitely a must-follow story!
Diana
I am enjoying this for two reasons
One, it is Speculative fiction... my stomping grounds... so familiar... i love being able to say what if and run with it.
Two, your writing style is drawing me in and i love seeing a world being built... trying to figure out customs and rules and especially origins...
Thanks for this Faeriemage... looks like the beginning of a wild ride.
Hugs,
Diana
I like this one Faeriemage
A nice change, with a bonus of sword fighting.
What more could one ask for?
Thank you.
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Rita
I'm a dyslexic agnostic insomniac.
'Someone who lies awake at night wondering if there's a dog.'
Age is an issue of mind over matter.
If you don't mind, it doesn't matter!
(Mark Twain)
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Rita