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Well shooooooot......
...yeeehawwwww!!!! Gol durn story upped and stawped just as it wuz gettin gud! Purty good ritin', though! Thankie kindly, suh!
Dio vi benedica tutti
Con grande amore e di affetto
Andrea Lena
Love, Andrea Lena
Thank ye Missy
Thet wuz a right fine compliment. I was looking to try something new and I found it really hard to get into the entire thing but I was really determined to try to write something out of the box for myself.
Bailey Summers
Accent
Thet wuz a purdy good speakin' yer self missy. Why am so out classed I think I'll go practice my Yoda accent, or there is always my Saudi accent. Now thet one more natural comes.
Gwendolyn
An' I thought
ALISON
'that Annie Oakley was fast!! I can just imagine that purty story being made into a movie with John Wayne
playin' the part of Nikki! You have done it again,Bailey.Congratulations.
ALISON
John Wayne?
I just can't imagine JW as Nikki!
'Ya better lisen, and ya better lisen tight, I'm gunna wear this girdle if I can get it to fit unless it kills me doin it!'
LoL
Rita
Age is an issue of mind over matter.
If you don't mind, it doesn't matter!
(Mark Twain)
LoL
Rita
Me being me....
I thought "Mmmmm ceps (porcini) in America? Goody!"
I pick them round here.
Bailey, A great little
Bailey, A great little story which was both fun and historical reading. Would be nice to see how Nikki and her lady friends do living in Patagonia. Did any of her other people go with them or just the three of them? Jan
Been There
Bailey,
I know you've been through that country, and I could see it in your description. The hydraulic miners did rape that country, and it will never recover. There is still a lot of gold left, but to get it out will further destroy the delicate landscape.
Now Nikki and her loves can raise a family. I wonder if they will run across Butch Cassidy and the Sun Dance Kid. They weren't too bad.
Portia
Portia
Yee-haw indeed!
If we wanted something different, this was it. So good, I couldn't put it down.
S.
Welcome Back!
I hadn't heard much from you in a while, figured Real Life was getting in the way. Great Story! I liked that a lot. I look forward to more!
Erendae
very good stuff
take a bow (or curtsy, if you prefer), you deserve a round of applause for this one.
dorothycolleen
Western
Not bad, but it does have some problems.
It reads a lot like an old dime novel by an author who had never been west of Philadelphia.
In any case a pretty good first try.
Eat Your Heart Out, Calamity Jane
Or is it Butch and the Circus-dancing Kid? Really good with some un-PC observations thrown in to good effect.
Fast-moving and believable,
Joanne
This was different for you.
As you mentioned, and overall a very good read, too. Seems you can work out of the box and all that. Interesting concept, well thought out, nice characters.
Maggie
I like how you did this
I've always thought there was a place for Westerns in this genre.I like how you used a real life condition to make it plausible.While it is outside your box hopefully you'll consider a follow up on this one to show how it all works out for them in Patagonia.Thanks for a fun read.
Amy
excellent!
Glad I had the time to read your story.
The Fastest Dress in The West
Nikki shure had an intrestin' life.
May Your Light Forever Shine
May Your Light Forever Shine
Ditto
RAMI
I will just say or write """ DITTO""" since the other comments say about as much as I good. Great Yarn.
RAMI
RAMI
Fun Story...
...all the anachronisms notwithstanding. (I'm trying to decide whether they actually help create the "tall tale" atmosphere here or simply don't do any harm.) Certainly quite a change of pace.
Eric
Yee-hah! =D
Ride 'em, cowboy! ^_^
Well, looks like Dove and Jade certainly rode Nikki... = )
Thank you Mr. Sexy Girl ma'am.
I certainly tried to make an enjoyable yarn. It was so far out of my genres though it was really hard to write. I'm glad you liked it.
Bailey Summers
Rip Roaring Western Adventures
I love what you did with the genre. Always enjoyed it as a kid, when Kwai Chang Cain was just trucking along minding his own business and some pack of arrogant belligerent macho hoopleheads decided to mess with him, or were being ungentlemanly toward an Indian girl or something, and they wound up getting their asses handed to them. This had plenty of those same sentiments with the addition of taking on the ugly sexism and male supremism of them days (while there might be some lovely non-patriarchalist Mormons, I'd say you got the attitudes of the worst of them about right...), and without all that stunned halting David Carridine dialogue. Fun story.
I'd scribbled a few paragraphs toward one about a time travelling MtF pre-op historian winding up as an attraction in an 1880's "raree show". I can delete that now, forget about it, since you covered most of what I intended to with that one, without the unweidly scifi gimmick, and with more sweet tender sex than I probably would've put into mine...
~hugs, Veronica
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PS: The only western I ever wrote was this drabble:
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by LAIKA PUPKINO
Some boys dream of becomin' ship captains, others jungle explorers. Maybe a few dream of bein' lamplighters. But my judgement was polluted by penny dreadfuls and tales of the Wild West. So when Satan offered me my heart's desire, I tole him t' make me an unbeatable gunfighter.
Shouldn'ta said unbeatable. After killing my first hundred men it warn't much fun. Once outta curiousity, I didn't even draw. Somehow th' feller shot an' kill't hisself!
I'm 90 now, and soon Old Scratch'll be claimin' my soul. But I was a legend in my day...
The Faustus Gun in the West.
for the axe had convinced them that because his handle
was made of wood he was one of them.
Oooooooooh
Groan...
Laika I really loved
this comment you left here for me. While they say you should write for the sake of writing I'm selfish enough I love my comments I get and one like this one...well Veronica it makes me feel like writing this was worth it all over again and gives me that rush after first writing it.
You drabble was amazing, except for the Faustest gun bit. You've got something there really.
I'm sending you a PM.
Bailey Summers
This Is A True Story
I was in a pub one night....yeah, I know, so unusual that it's almost unbelievable,,,,and "Kung Fu" was on the TV in the bar. Suddenly, somebody miscued and the sound of a broken glass stopped conversation, until a wit said,
I still love this story, penny-dreadful or not (and notwithstanding Ronnie's awesome pun),
Joanne
LOL! Thank You:)
That's so funny it has to be true.
Bailey Summers
Im in ur computer reeding ur older storeez
Sorry, I couldn't resist using a bad LOLcat impression...
Loved this story. Every bit of it. Except one thing. I would have liked to see Nikki confront Lucien Morgan before he was killed (or even kill him herself), after let him know she was taking back her life and that she was unbroken despite all he'd done to her... Would have given closure, and helped her self esteem too, and let her more quickly accept/enjoy her new identity as a woman on the outside and to the rest of the world while still basically being a straight man on the inside.
Although in that case, maybe she wouldn't have gone through that stage of trying to convince everyone she was still a man, and been so wounded and hurt and crying in the shower when Dove came along to comfort her... Hmm... Maybe it's best it went the way it did, even though Lucien deserved a much nastier ending for his crimes. Still, great story otherwise. :)
hugs from
Lisa the Bad LOLcat
I think I like the LOLcat.
I'm really happy you liked it. It was really hard writing this one. It was so far out of my comfort zone. I wasn't the biggest fan of westerns but I thought it's be a real test of my writing.
*Scratches behind the ears.*
Bailey.
Bailey Summers
Comfort Zones and Such
*purrr*
Yeah, I know what you mean about comfort zones. And westerns aren't usually my bag of tea either. Unless they have some other sort of hook to another genre. Robots or aliens, say. Or something TG related. *wink*
You do pretty good when working outside the box. Some authors just rewrite the same plot over and over... (at the other extreme)
Lisa
I try to push it a bit.
I find it's like lifting weights. If I write something new it's like working at a higher weight then it just seems easier to go back to my regular stuff.
*Hugs*
Bailey.
Bailey Summers
the US and UK have done
the US and UK have done some shi.,y things to so called natives. Took Doctor King M iss Parks and othes in the 60s to get rights for so called coloureds. Native AMericans had it even worse