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Clue?!?
Bwuh?!? Ohhhhhh.... that's evil, hiding something clearly important from the reader. Given Jenn's reaction I'd guess that whatever 'that' is it has something to do with his (her?) breasts. Aaarrgh, it's like one of those detective shows where you get small clues over an entire series that don't seem to add up to anything until the end.
That being said, I am enjoying this story. You do very well at developing the characters in such short chapters. Each of the girls feels well rounded and different. I look forward to chapter 9 of being tortured!! ;-)
"Just once I want my life to be like an 80's movie, preferably one with a really awesome musical number for no apparent reason. But no, no, John Hughes did not direct my life."
"Life moves pretty fast. If you don't stop and look around once in a while, you could miss it."
Evil is as evil does
Bwah ha ha! :)
Hugs,
Erin
= Give everyone the benefit of the doubt because certainty is a fragile thing that can be shattered by one overlooked fact.
= Give everyone the benefit of the doubt because certainty is a fragile thing that can be shattered by one overlooked fact.
Another clue?
a few lines below:
"Girl's got nothing to hold the suit up, no hips, no tits," said Carmine.
Jenn had a funny look but said nothing.
I'm waiting for more clues in the next chapter(s) ;)
Martina
Clues closet
I think there will be more clues soon, if not next chapter then the one after that... probably. :)
Hugs,
Erin
= Give everyone the benefit of the doubt because certainty is a fragile thing that can be shattered by one overlooked fact.
= Give everyone the benefit of the doubt because certainty is a fragile thing that can be shattered by one overlooked fact.
Aha....I knew it...I knew it....
....this story is so easy to figure out....except when it isn't....Never mind!
Dio vi benedica tutti
Con grande amore e di affetto
Andrea Lena
Love, Andrea Lena
Still confused...
I'm assuming this is set on Earth and that Juice!Justin is an anatomically correct male, albeit a Wholesome Crossdresser (at last partially because it's easier to blend in with the girls he's friendly with).
Meanwhile Zoe appears to be an anatomically correct female.
The confusion over Juice's apparently symptoms of pregnancy aren't exactly helped by the slang word "putz" (even though Urban Dictionary informs me it's rarely used in the anatomical sense).
Hopefully at some point before the final chapter, things will start adding up and making some degree of sense...
There are 10 kinds of people in the world - those who understand binary and those who don't...
As the right side of the brain controls the left side of the body, then only left-handers are in their right mind!
Story set on Earth
But other facts not in evidence are facts not in evidence. I'm just saying. :)
Hugs,
Erin
= Give everyone the benefit of the doubt because certainty is a fragile thing that can be shattered by one overlooked fact.
= Give everyone the benefit of the doubt because certainty is a fragile thing that can be shattered by one overlooked fact.
I so enjoy this story
even if I have no more idea about where it's headed than I did in part one. So juice has an extra small swim suit, does that make it fresh squeezed juice?
Angharad :)
Angharad
Squeeze me?
Well the fact is, the swimsuit is NOT tight on Juice. This is one seriously slender kid. :)
Hugs,
Erin
= Give everyone the benefit of the doubt because certainty is a fragile thing that can be shattered by one overlooked fact.
= Give everyone the benefit of the doubt because certainty is a fragile thing that can be shattered by one overlooked fact.
The Pregnant Boy -9- Normal
Those girls are having fun dressing Juice.
May Your Light Forever Shine
May Your Light Forever Shine
Reading about it
I hope people are having fun reading about it.:)
Hugs,
Erin
= Give everyone the benefit of the doubt because certainty is a fragile thing that can be shattered by one overlooked fact.
= Give everyone the benefit of the doubt because certainty is a fragile thing that can be shattered by one overlooked fact.
Juice is evil!
"I have excellent taste," says Justin, looking at the price tag of the swimsuit someone else would be buying for him. "I like this," continues Justin, watching Shabeez squirm.
So, a little gumption, not a complete pushover, our boy Justin. Pretty easygoing, but, but... just a leettle eville.
Yours,
JohnBobMead
Yours,
John Robert Mead
Based on me
If I go up to a rack of clothes and pick out the one that I like best, it will also be the most expensive one. :)
Hugs,
Erin
= Give everyone the benefit of the doubt because certainty is a fragile thing that can be shattered by one overlooked fact.
= Give everyone the benefit of the doubt because certainty is a fragile thing that can be shattered by one overlooked fact.
Makes sense...
The trick, of course, is to make sure it's being bought with someone else's money - then you can avoid the guilt :)
--B
As the right side of the brain controls the left side of the body, then only left-handers are in their right mind!
poor Juice - or maybe not
you think finding a extra small is hard, imagine trying to find a 4X ...
I trust you, you'll make this make sense.
Dorothycolleen, member of Bailey's Angels
Sense?
Oh, probably. :)
Hugs,
Erin
= Give everyone the benefit of the doubt because certainty is a fragile thing that can be shattered by one overlooked fact.
= Give everyone the benefit of the doubt because certainty is a fragile thing that can be shattered by one overlooked fact.
More than just kind of pregnant
I think the smoking clue has been dropped. How's that for mixing metaphors? Consider it a side effect of all the teasing in this story. Heh.
I'm really enjoying this. I wonder if Jenn will give away the clue to the other girls. Only time will tell.
Thanks and kudos.
- Terry
Clues Closet
I think I'll leave people hanging around for a bit on that one. :)
Hugs,
Erin
= Give everyone the benefit of the doubt because certainty is a fragile thing that can be shattered by one overlooked fact.
= Give everyone the benefit of the doubt because certainty is a fragile thing that can be shattered by one overlooked fact.
Tease
All we have are teasing clues that are suggestive, but we still KNOW nothing. I guess that's part of what makes it fun trying to guess and untangle the clues. As always, you do the best banter, Erin!
hugs
Grover
Star Spangled Banter?
I sit around in public places and listen to people talk. I always have a book for me but that's just protective coloration, I'm doing research. :)
Hugs,
Erin
= Give everyone the benefit of the doubt because certainty is a fragile thing that can be shattered by one overlooked fact.
= Give everyone the benefit of the doubt because certainty is a fragile thing that can be shattered by one overlooked fact.
Delicious! = )
How could I have forgotten about the shopping for the swimsuit? If the pool party is next, maybe THAT one will be "nautics". :)
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Royal catgirl of the court of the Empress of Euphoria. I like fine seafood, and I love huggles! ^_^
Pool party
The pool party is several days away. There are several other incidents before we get to that. :)
Nautics?
Hugs,
Erin
= Give everyone the benefit of the doubt because certainty is a fragile thing that can be shattered by one overlooked fact.
= Give everyone the benefit of the doubt because certainty is a fragile thing that can be shattered by one overlooked fact.
Oh,
don't mind me. "nautics" is one of my many made up words, and I think it loosely relates to swimming, and of course it begins with "n". I love swimming, and I'm certainly not afraid of water, unlike your average kitty. I guess I just have swimming on the brain! = )
*HuggleSnugglePurr*
I think I must have water in general on the brain, in the metaphorical sense. That's where prawns come from, after all. I do love prawns...
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Royal catgirl of the court of the Empress of Euphoria. I like fine seafood, and I love huggles! ^_^
Naughtics?
I thought you might mean something else. :)
Hugs,
Erin
= Give everyone the benefit of the doubt because certainty is a fragile thing that can be shattered by one overlooked fact.
= Give everyone the benefit of the doubt because certainty is a fragile thing that can be shattered by one overlooked fact.
Sell it... ;)
This is the kind of story that'd do well on the subscription thing... I'd pay to get the whole thing at once anyway... ;)
JC
The Legendary Lost Ninja
You wouldn't care to do that
for Bike would you? Say a dollar an episode?
Angharad :)
Angharad
Ha!
Well, I will try to put a collected version of TPB into Hatbox when it is finished. But at even 50 cents per episode, Bike would be something else!
Hugs,
Erin
= Give everyone the benefit of the doubt because certainty is a fragile thing that can be shattered by one overlooked fact.
= Give everyone the benefit of the doubt because certainty is a fragile thing that can be shattered by one overlooked fact.
You realize, of course,
that this is my favorite story being posted to the site at the moment, right?
So, Juice's development is apparently further along than we would be led to believe from his/her own observations. What'll we find out next, that Zoe knows everything and is some kind of strange alien or something?
Melanie E.
I don't THINK she's an alien...
Actually, things all have a perfectly ordinary and reasonable explanation and as soon as I find out what it is... I'll keep it a secret for at least ten more chapters. :)
Hugs,
Erin
= Give everyone the benefit of the doubt because certainty is a fragile thing that can be shattered by one overlooked fact.
= Give everyone the benefit of the doubt because certainty is a fragile thing that can be shattered by one overlooked fact.
Ordinary and reasonable for
Ordinary and reasonable for what given value thereof?
I'll get a life when it's proven and substantiated to be better than what I'm currently experiencing.
Ten?
Judging from the first letter of each Chapter Name, you appear to be spelling the word "pregnant" in two letter increments. This would indicate that the story may end on Chapter 16... unless your names will spell "pregnant boy"... in which case it will be pushed to 22. Or you're spelling nothing at all and just pulling our legs, as you've done the entire story. Woo!
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I would put a signature here, but I'm too busy writing other things :)
I would put a signature here, but I'm too busy writing other things :)
Next title is
Natural, I think. :)
Hugs,
Erin
= Give everyone the benefit of the doubt because certainty is a fragile thing that can be shattered by one overlooked fact.
= Give everyone the benefit of the doubt because certainty is a fragile thing that can be shattered by one overlooked fact.
Well?
...I suppose you might say we're pregnant with expectation?
Dio vi benedica tutti
Con grande amore e di affetto
Andrea Lena
Love, Andrea Lena
Breasts
I wonder if she has those and anything else Jenn had a funny look.
hugs :)
Michelle SidheElf Amaianna
Itsy Bitsy, Teeny Weeny
Re-reading this, you missed a trick by not having the design having a base colour of primrose, covered with differently coloured spots... :D
As the right side of the brain controls the left side of the body, then only left-handers are in their right mind!