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Jasmine
might very well do things that Jim can't. LOL :)
May Your Light Forever Shine
Not too bad
could have been a little smoother in transition from scene to scene, but I probably would have given too much away.
Goddess Bless you
Love Desiree
Thank you
Thank you for reading and your input.
I agree entirely with the not so smooth transitions. However, when writing in this style I generally rely on this to fit as many scenes and action in to the short story format as possible and whenever I think a scene will start losing its interest or ramble on a little I try to move on asap.
Payback
It would be an interesting follow-up to see what happens to the two people that caused Jim's problems in the first place. It was a quick paced story that many could follow.
Liked this better on the second
read through, think I am in a better mood. Of course no morning sickness so far this morning so that;s a good sign.
Goddess Bless you
Love Desiree