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The way Stevie "fell in
The way Stevie "fell in love" right away with Lisa makes me believe that he has already been back in time and found her then as a child and is now wanting her as a woman. It was way too quick otherwise. I did notice one typo regarding their meal bill. You mentioned that the owner made their meals on the house due to the engagment announcement and then you said "after we paid the bill" when they left the building. Did not mess up the story line however, and it is a nice, sweet story as it is written. J-Lynn
The first part sounds pretty
The first part sounds pretty good. Maybe a bit unbelieveable that Steve would fall in love with David/Lisa so soon, after only a few days, even if he was very open-minded and everything.
Otherwisely pretty good, the time-continuum theory sounds good and believeable too.
I'm looking forward to read what happens next.