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Both of your entries have been wonderful
Both of your entries have been wonderful, they reach the heart, and make the emotions in the story that much more significant. Please continue this one, I would be very interested in it, it brings back a lot of memories of my youth. Thanks for sharing it with us.
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Francesca
Thanks, Francesca!
I appreciate the Kudos! It sounds like you had an interesting youth!
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Amadeus Irina
Cliffhanger time, please continue. I have been going through your stories and finding a new story is always a treat.
Time is the longest distance to your destination.
Cliffhangers...
Yeah--dirty little buggers, I know. Sorry about that. It really was the best place to make a break in the story, though. No--really! :)
I am glad you like my stories. Thanks!!!
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wonderful start
I love it ! I hope you can give us more!
Thanks!
I am working on it--I will try to get at least one posted a week. :)
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As usual for you
Your writing is excellent. It's off to a good start.
Not to pester too much (I hope) is there any chance you'll be getting back to Birthday Blues anytime soon?
If you don't stand for something you'll fall for anything.
Hmmm...Birthday Blues...
I do need to finish that one, and get to Book 2 of Thai Pie, and, of course I promised to finish CEO as soon as I was done with the Christmas thing...
I think *I* need a gift--of more time!!! :D
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Great start
This was a great start to this story. Keep it up!
Thanks!
I appreciate the Kudos (and PMs) from everyone!!!
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Shauna, this is the third
Shauna, this is the third straight story for the contest that would be amazing any time of year. It brought up a lot of questions and opened strongly. I hope you keep up with this story until Christmas as it is going to be a nice read during the fall :)
I'm told STFU more times in a day than most people get told in a lifetime
Wow! Thanks!
I will certainly do my best to keep it up through the holidays. It will likely be on the order of one post (or maybe two, if I'm lucky) a week.
Thanks for the comments!
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Great... be encouraged
I know, as an author, that people are reticent to leave comments and likes. It can be dispiriting. So, this one grabbed me at the start and hasn't let go. I really like it, as it is so real. I can smell the stale brownie, and feel the tangles in his hair. Keep going, (and quickly!)
Tanya
There's no such thing as bad weather, just the wrong clothes!
Thanks, Tanya!
I appreciate the feedback--it means a lot!
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Why?
Why did the mother force the boy to dance female parts? And dressed like a girl to boot?
Good question...
Stay tuned! :)
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Good start
This is extremely interesting - please continue.
I am glad you like it!
I plan on sketching out the draft of Chapter 2 tonight. I hope to post maybe Friday, or this weekend.
I plan to
thoroughly enjoy this story. I was and still am a musician at heart. I played in our school orchestra, dance band AND Senior Band... Which means I also had to be out in the worst weather imaginable to "support" the Feetsball Team at all their games. At games I switched between trumpet and marching drum depending on how many players showed up.
Brrrr...
LOL! Well, I am a music imposter--at least in terms of the violin! I couldn't play a note if my life depended on it! BUT! I DO have a (not so paid) consultant! SO...I hope to keep it real... Now, while I never danced ballet, I DO have a daughter that was pre-professional, so...I am on firmer footing there...
No matter! I hope you still enjoy it!!!
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Contest, what contest?
I don't pay any attention whatsoever to so many things, but I know a good story and an excellent author when I see one. Thank you so much for starting this and I hope that you continue this beautifully written tale to its logical conclusion.
Thank you so much.
Gwen
Don't think of it as a contest, so much as a CHALLENGE! :)
That is how I see it--how can I write as many fun stories about gifts as I can? And hopefully others will, too. (Sorry, Sephy--it really ISN'T about the money...)
Anyway, thanks for the kudos, Gwen. I will do my best!
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There's so much to look forward to
It's a great story with some great hints at a back story.
Thanks!
I appreciate the kudos!
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Loved this story
I loved this and cant wait to see more. Keep up the good work
Glad you liked it!
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Please continue!
You have a great start. I'll be watching for more.
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Thanks, Bobbie Sue!
I am getting my ducks in a row for Chapter 2 and hope to have it out by this weekend!
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Shauna dear, you caused a tear!
Yes, yes you did. Right at the last little bit. Am I right in assuming his parents have passed on? I'm guessing the circumstances of this will be coming out soon. You have been painting the pictures of each scene very well deary! Loving Hugs Talia
Tis the season...
You know all of those tear-jerkers come out this time of year! (Well, maybe AFTER Halloween, normally, but then again, it is always Merry HalloThankmas anymore...)
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I overlooked this story, but
I overlooked this story, but now can simply say I am sorry for doing so. It does make one think alot about kids who are out on the streets and what they can truly bring to others around them at certain times.
I am certainly glad you found your way to it!
I hope you like it!
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Gumby child
Some parents Amadeus had, pulling him towards their own selfish directions. Did he want to dance? Did he want to play the violin? He wasn't given a choice, he WAS going to do both because tradition said so. In this case, tradition was so wrong. In this case, it was tradition which caused him to run away from home and live on the street.
Maybe had they asked he might have chosen on his own. But it's a moot point now because he now has to explain his presence in the old school.
Others have feelings too.
Give it time...
There is still a lot to learn about Amadeus and his family. :)
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65F!!!!!!!11
65F is very wasteful, way too high for an empty building. 65F is perfectly OK for working hours ...
And she brought it DOWN to 65F? From what?
The heating bill must be crippling.
I keep my house at 57-58F (14-15C), but that's just me, I suppose ...
It would be down from roughly
It would be down from roughly 70 to 72F, the typical temperature for a building during winter months in the northeast US. That temperature is typical of overnight heating temperatures, remember that there are boarders at the school so there are still people at the school even though the office block where Day was found is empty.
I'm told STFU more times in a day than most people get told in a lifetime
Poor, freezing boarders
Didn't think about them :)
So...it is an old building...
Eff is right about the boarders and they ARE in a separate building and toasty warm. As for the office/class/studio complex, the insulation is not what it likely should be--and yes, that is wasteful, too, but a minimum temperature must be maintained for several reasons... The pipes will freeze otherwise and, with the old furnace, it would take way too long to get the temperature back up. And, yes, 70-72 is the norm for such buildings. If it were purely a dance school, it wouldn't be an issue, they would stay warm through the exercise. I don't think it would be good to have the violinists wearing gloves, though. :D
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Still Good, if not better!
Still Good, if not better!
I am thinking of maybe publishing it...
Thanks for the kudos!
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S
Grrrrrr
Darn you! You've written a page turner... and I wanted to go to sleep. Your hard work is obvious. I find myself skipping over alot of the duplicated dialogue in the parallel views. Seems cumbersome.
This is very good writing.
It gets better! :)
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S
This is an Excellent Work!
And it's all because I read Gwen Brown's post on May 29 entitled "Stories that Profoundly Affect Us".
Thank you for writing it!
Like stained glass
Hi Shauna
I finished binge reading your ‘Amadeus Irina’ stories early this morning, like at 12:03AM and it was great! I had started reading the story when you first serialized it but I somehow lost the thread, title, and author – I guess I got distracted by a squirrel or something shiny. But I saw a comment that addressed Amadeus and the story rushed back to my mind and I had to finish it and I did!!
I did have to start at the beginning again, but that was okay as it allowed me to get used to your writing style again. The way you give each character’s view point for each event/scene was distracting at first but I found that it actually gave me a better understanding of what each character was thinking at the time so I actually connected better to everyone and to being able to see the whole picture. At first it was liking looking at a bunch of little pieces of colored glass scattered across a tabletop but then see them arrange themselves into a whole – like stained glass – it was beautiful!
Thank you for sharing this story with me, wish I could pay you with a song – but all I can give is thank you and thumbs up.
Jeri Elaine
Homonyms, synonyms, heterographs, contractions, slang, colloquialisms, clichés, spoonerisms, and plain old misspellings are the bane of writers, but the art and magic of the story is in the telling not in the spelling.
Wow! That is a nice analogy!
Thank you for the post--I love it!
I am certainly glad you liked the story and am happy with the thumbs-up! :)
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S